Sunday, November 18, 2018

Writing persuasive texts



Today Miss Ashley showed us how to write a plan for a persuasive text and then use the plan to help us write.

PLANNING:


Title: Rugby is better than netball!

Intro:
I agree.
3 ideas - get paid more, Kiwi culture, more fitness.

Paragraph 1:
Different players and teams get different amounts. Skills based.
**all blacks get paid millions.
Black ferns - get paid waaaaaaaay less.

Paragraph 2:
People from NZ always support rugby - all blacks are super famous - NZ always wins - won the world cup.
Paragraph 3:
Training everyday, in rugby you run a lot, netball you don’t. Netball court is smaller than a rugby field.
**Although netball is smaller court/not running, it has less injuries. Less agressive.
Conclusion:
These are my reasons why I agree that...



Miss Ashley's writing: 
Rugby is better than netball! 
I agree that rugby is better than netball! Rugby players get paid more than netball players, it is a major part of Kiwi culture and rugby players are way fitter than netball players.

In New Zealand, rugby players get paid huge amounts of money per season or depending on their contract. It is a hugely desirable job that also gives you other benefits. Yes, you get paid to actually play rugby. But you also can get modelling contracts like how Dan Carter was a model for Jockey, you can also get paid to do other kinds of jobs just because you are famous. For example how Richie McCaw is the ambassador for Fonterra Milk in Schools. He would get paid extra to do that as well. What people might not realise is that the men’s rugby team, the All Blacks, get paid a lot more than the female team, the Black Ferns. The Black Ferns also don’t get the opportunity to earn extra money through modelling or being an ambassador, so a lot of them still have normal jobs to help them survive day to day. This is rather unfair considering the Black Ferns are highly ranked in the world just the same as the All Blacks.

Another reason I agree that rugby is better than netball is that it is a huge part of kiwi culture. When people think about Kiwi culture, they think about buzzy bees, BBQs, the beach, rugby and the beautiful scenery that NZ has. We are famous in the world for having amazing rugby players. A lot of our rugby players go to play for other countries (and get paid even more to do so!) because the standard of our players is so high.

A third reason why rugby is better than netball is because to play rugby, you need to be fitter than you do for Netball. It is obvious to everyone that in netball you aren’t allowed to run with the ball, so essentially you just stand still. What a lazy sport! In rugby you have to run the whole field, so you have to be really really fit and strong. You also have to tackle, so you have to have really strong legs and back to be able to tackle people to the ground. The field is way bigger in rugby than the court is in netball, so your endurance must be stronger. The All Blacks train every single day to keep fit enough to play competitive. Something to consider though, is that netball is a non-contact sport and has very few injuries. Rugby however, is a rough and tumble sport where injuries occur every single game. These injuries could ruin a players life and career. Brain damage and concussions are common.

I hope I have convinced you that rugby is better than netball! The next time you go out to play a sport, choice rugby!


Here are some of our writing examples.


Should Fidget spinners be allowed in class?

I disagree with the statement ‘fidget spinners should be allowed in class.’ Because people can distract people while being busy with work, they can hurt people and they are very very expensive.

For my first disagreement was fidget spinners should not be aloud in class because people will get distracted by them. They can get distracted by plating with them in the middle of learning. So the kids will get distracted by them so the kids won't be able to learn.

My second reason is that they can hurt people, they can hurt people by putting it near their teeth then it will bump it. sometimes people can hurt each other and throw it at each other. Then they will fight over them.

My last reason is it is very very very expensive and it is hard to bye. So when you go school some people might shove it in your face if you don’t have one.

So that is why I think fidget spinners should not be aloud in class.

By Davlyn

break time at school should be longer

I disagree that break time should be longer. The three reasons why I disagree are hats can be expensive, less learning time and get bored playing the same games.

Outside play should be shorter because we won't have time to learn about history, maths, reading and writing because we had our breaktime longer and that’s why I don’t want break time to be longer because we can’t go college and university.

Break time needs to be shorter because hats can be expensive for people because when it’s summer you can get sunburn or skin cancer which is really bad for our body.

The worst thing about break time to be longer is because you get bored playing the same games and ….


By Railey.

Rugby is better than netball
The whole of New Zealand loves rugby. At a lot of school boys and girls are in rugby teams that means the parents want them to get a good future. Some of the All Black were in local rugby club close to their house. After their rugby club days they went to college rugby if they get a scholarship or pay. Later on in life they might get an offer to join a super rugby team like the The Blues and the hurricanes. Rugby is better than netball because kids and adults get fit and it will help with your brain development.

On one hand people on New Zealand disagree about rugby because most people get hurt and damaged which leads to parent crying if seriously injured or death.Around the world they play rugby for fun in school but on the field it get seriously because you can get hit badly on a bad spot of body like 4you're head. I disagree because you could die on rugby which is really bad for us.

Rugby is bad because their is a lot of physical interacting with other players.There's a lot of sweating rugby because training and recovering from injuries like if you broke your leg and you want to go play rugby by you have to use your legs everyday to help getting use to it.Finally the last reason why rugby is bad for some people is because some offer from teams around the world have to send the player out to there training grounds and their country for 3 year or more.

Rugby is amazing sport because you can be famous and win thousand of dollars which can make your family happy. But the best thing about rugby is working together as a team and relying on team if you need help.You can get money from winning rugby game and going to another team which is good because every team make different amount of money and you can send it back to your family.

Rugby is good because it good for your health and your body.

By Timote.

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